Distant,
in the world of hearts,
a dream flutters its wings,
innocent desires spin new webs,
wilting roses kiss the fringes of life,
murmuring secrets silence deep regrets,
mystical love pervades the untouched soul,
running tears cascade through forbidden lands,
rotten insides embrace the sprouting spring,
vacant thoughts buzz with commotion,
felicity suffocates apprehension,
faith fortifies intention,
and evades all fears,
to welcome home,
a new life!!!
Your poem has a "built in message" which is thought provoking of course. It's worth reading.
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Someone said, “our attitude towards life determines life's attitude towards us.”
AND: How about this one?
Life is short, live it. Love is rare, grab it. Anger is bad, dump it. Fear is awful, face it. Memories are sweet. Cherish them...
@Tariq Mian
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our attitude towards life determines life's attitude towards us...... v ture, an optimistic thought that helps one briskly tread the many vicissitudes of life..
and the second one… :) is music to ears firstly, and no doubt is the recipe for a happy and complete life!!!
thanx for enlightening me....!!! I really appreciate ur thoughtful comments ..!
It’s Vivacious!!!
ReplyDeleteAesthetically written, and the message that it simulates of a new life, indeed elevates the reader with medley of profound phrases like ''murmuring secrets silence deep regrets''
:-)
@usama
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nicely crafted lines...lovely words!
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ReplyDeletethank u :)
did you work on the way poem appears the shortest to longest line and shorrt again?
ReplyDeletewonderfully done, no exaggeration , this is a very good work
the slow arousal then a climax and an unending conclusion.
i am very glad i found your work
Thanx 4 aapreciating my indisciplined thots..i wrote this wen some of these naughty thots broke off all barbs of restraint so most of it jst flowed the rest was imprfectly tailored
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